Today, children are experiencing increased educational, social and commercial pressure. Discuss problems caused by this phenomenon and some solution.
어떤식으로 에세이를 풀어나가야할지 모르겟네요...
서론은 어떤식으로 써야할지 막막하네요....
바디는 세개로 바디마다 문제점과 솔루션을 적을생각입니다.
바디1
Problem
Educational pressure : getting stress from studying, make children lose intrests in academic subjects.
Solution
....?
바디2
Social pressure: ....?
바디3
Problem
Commercial pressure : children are becoming a major comsumer group, most company have targeted young children for commercial benefits.
Solution
The government should regulate advertisement aimed to children and parents and teachers need to teach them a method of spending money wisely.
결론쓰고 마무리할까하는데
서론을 어떨게써야할지 와 바디1 솔루션 바디2 문제점,솔루션에 관해 조언좀 부탁드립니다.. 꾸벅(_,_)